Lincoln's Gettysburg address was less than 275 words in length!
Dr. Seuss' best book (arguably) was written after someone bet the literary M.D. couldn't write a book using less than 50 words.
Now while the above instances of succinctness may have lead to timeless quotable pieces of American history, my brevity might lead to me failing English! :P Seriously, I can't ever seem to get these things over 4 minutes.
Anyway, here's my selected passage which can be found in Macbeth, at the end of Act I, Scene III:
Here's my practice IOC:
And here's my self-evaluation:
Criterion A: 5
I believe I established good context at the beginning of my presentation and showed a sufficient amount of knowledge concerning the origin of the text. I also supported every point I made with some reference to the text but wasn't always well focused on what exactly I was trying to prove.
Criterion B: 3
I definitely mentioned literary devices but talked more about their overall effect on the work and events within it, rather than the effect on readers or audience members.
Criterion C: 5
I felt that my presentation was very clearly structured and organized. I had a clear introduction which matched with my conclusion. I also presented my supporting evidence in the order that I introduced it.
Criterion D: 4
Aside from a few little slip ups, I felt my register and style were appropriately semi-informal. My points were clearly laid out and connected.
Total Score: 17
That sounds way too high to be even close to accurate but I wasn't sure where the best place was to dock points for time.
Guess it's time to start working hard to turn my Lincoln into a Baron!
I really like the structure of your practice IOC. Each different sections appears to be carefully thought out and budgeted very well. I also like your use of the different literary terminology. It helped to make your ioc work more valid and orderly. You were also easy to understand, I often talk to fast, and I think it is very valuable to slow down and annunciate as clearly as possible.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Grayson! (: Glad somebody thought it was good :P
DeleteI agree with Grayson that you talked very clearly and slowly which is often very hard when you are making a presentation. I also liked your use of literary devices and especially liked how you linked them to other literary devices. The way that you structured your IOC was very clear and logical and made it easy to follow for the reader. I thought you did a good job and am not sure how to add more time to that either. Maybe just channel your inner Baron like you said.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Walter! I'm not sure if I'll be able to keep things quite as cool and slow-going as I did in this recording but practice makes perfect! (:
DeleteI agree with both Grayson and Walter (aw my kindergarten bffs) that talking clearly and slowly is very important! I also agree that the organization of your IOC was very good, as it made it easy to follow along as I was listening. For Criterion B, I would give you a 4 because talking about the effect IS very important, and even though it wasn't focused on the audience, I feel as though you did an amazing job talking about the effect it had on the passage.
ReplyDeleteI also think you had a very strong thesis statement as it gave you something to refer back to during your conclusion. You may be a few minutes short but Macbeth is hard to analyze and you did an amazing job!
Thanks so much, Sarah!! Y'alls comments are making me feel a lot better about this! (:
DeleteHailey, your witty comments in these blog posts never cease to make me chuckle. Although yes, your IOC is pretty short, you do a very good job of getting your point across in such a short amount of time! One thing that might help make it longer is that you point out different locations in the passage, but feel free to read some of the words from those lines rather than just quickly summarize it. By reading the lines instead of summarizing them, you will actually be using the language of Shakespeare and it would make talking about the specific language of the passage easier. overall you did fabulously!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Natalie (: I try to keep the overall blog style somewhat consistently me. I think that's a really great suggestion. I did pull out some direct quotes but definitely not as many as I had the opportunity to. I'll definitely use that to my advantage next time!
DeleteI really liked your IOC and even though it was short you were able to hit on some good points. You made it very easy to understand what you were saying, and pointed out what you were talking about very clearly. I like how you formatted what you were talking about and went in a logical order. I thought it was really good how you pointed out certain diction and what is caused as I think that was an important point.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Marisa! I was a little worried about structure/organization so I'm glad my points were clear!
DeleteLots of comments on this one! Honestly, I chose this one because I had a gut feeling that it was going to be pretty well done because, well, its Hailey Glick, everyone. Your IOC was very sophisticated, which I admire. Just like mine, it was under the time marker, but I also think that you got your point across. You might be able to talk a little slower and give a little more description, if that's possible, in the actual IOC and you will seriously do great. Your IOC was also structured very cleanly, which is an odd word to use but it feels right. I knew exactly where you were going, and what you were leading up to. I think that if you try to expand it for the real IOC, you will succeed!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bella! It's really awesome to see so many positive comments and support. I really appreciate all of you. (:
DeleteI agree just like all the rest with all your strong points. I think that you speak very well and keep calm and collect as well as outlining your points well. I also agree with you though that just merely based on the amount of time your recording was that your score might be a little over. I feel that the two categories that would be docked the most would be the first two because they pertain the most to content and anytime you are short, weather it be a word count or recording time, your info is usually a little lacking. I dont mean to knock you though I have the same problem meeting requirements all the time because I say what I have to and then i'm done. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nick!! You're probably 100% right! And I'm the same way: short, sweet, and to the point :P
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